Kylie J

This was really good at conveying your emotions, it felt like the poem really spoke to me. As for a tittle, I think "Messenger of the Darkness" sounds good. I ...

I liked it a lot and I agree with knowing different styles before critiquing them. Anyway, I think the story of the poem is fine. The one problem I found ...

It was good, but it left me confused. You jump from idea to idea or introduce completely new things. For example, hollow of the suffering and joy and empty, it’s ...

I basically agree with Liz and Chevy: the last half is really great, but the beginning isn't too strong. Here are my ideas: To improve the first few stanzas, I ...

Again, I liked this one a lot too. It focuses a lot on dialogue, which is good and helps move the story along well, but it needs more detail. Maybe ...

Wow, I thought this was great so far. It's absorbing yet believable. The one problem I found: And then, I was on the ground, clawing at the concrete, breathing deeply. ...

I liked that. It wasn't overdone and the descriptions made it seem real. - or if it was there crude yelps and lame comebacks. - or if it was their ...

The one thing I would change it punctuation. The entire poem is one sentence. Since, at points, you begin different ideas, you should use some periods. A dance that means ...

Wow I really liked that. It had good descriptions and definitely held my interest. I only found one mistake: “Pardon me,” the man aid in heavily accented English. ---> "Pardon ...